Byakuya Ruderia

[Byakuya Ruderia]

I T ' S A P L E A S U R E T O M E E T Y O U ,
Byakuya Ruderia

AGE eighteen
SEXUALITY bisexual
SPECIES pureblood
PLAY BY Alice Academy- Persona

LOVES
· moon
· music
· blood

LOATHES
· sunlight
· Level E
· hunters

THE GOOD
· intelligent
· kind
· focused

THE BAD
· isolated
· menacing
· cold

appearances can be deceiving
S O I T O O K O F F M Y M A S K ,

· PROFILE) Byakuya has short black hair and red eyes but over his red eyes he wears a white mask while he doesn't let anyone see his red eyes. He wears all goth clothes and he has black lipstick on his lips. Byakuya wears rings on his fingers, and he earrings on his ears. He even has a ear cuff that goes above the earrings. He is at the height of five foot and seven inches, and weighs just slightly at one hundred lbs.

· HISTORY) Byakuya was born eighteen years ago to the parents of Shiro and Juka Ruderia. He has one younger sister by the name of Lilith who he does protect for the longest time. Lilith had been made fun of when she was younger. Byakuya had been trying to figure out his life. He was born as a pureblood vampire who had been some sanity left in him. He just figure out that he was going to do about this. He had went to Cross Academy since he was sixteen. He had been living through the years trying to keep Kaien Cross's dream alive. Of course he would take in any human that would want to become a vampire and keep their sanity with them. He had been living through the nightmares and he hadn't agreed with the Vampire Council.

· ADDITIONAL)
- water
- control plants
- binding
- telepathy
- blood whip

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OOC NAME Zazie
RP EXPERIENCE fifteen years
WHERE DID YOU FIND US? already a member

made by TOKY of OTE.

[Miwa Kamiko]

There is some potential seen in this character, but as it stands now, there are a few holes.

Just so that's the main characters can keep their unique features, it would be nice to leave out the mask since Zero's brother is pretty much only known for that.

Also it had been stated in the rules that if someone wished to take on the role of a pureblood, they had to pm the admin or me and also choose one of the listed last names, not create a new pureblood race.

There was also some confusion caused due to some grammatical errors. For instance, you had said "He was born a pureblood vampire who had been some sanity left to him."? I'm not quite sure where you're trying to go with that. Then say that he takes in humans who want to be vampires letting them keep their sanity. Does that mean he goes around turning people into lower class vampires but not let them resort to level E's?

Then back to what makes other characters unique. You mention water and blood whip. Blood whip is taken by the main character Shiki and, although Miwa is not a main character, that is her only feature. Try to dig into other things or leave it to the manipulation of nature and such. I am curious as to what you mean specifically when you say binding? Please specify.

That's all for now and hope to see some changes. Don't take anything personal, it's just characters are leaving too much slack in themselves and later acting different in threads. Hope you try again. Thank you for listening to ALL of this.